Hi all-
I was wondering if anyone would be willing to comment on my motivation statement? Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. I am trying (desperately) to get into Navy Intel--something I have always wanted to do.
I adapt. I believe I do it well; especially in other countries and cultures. I dropped myself in Costa Rica, Taiwan, and Italy for extended periods of time and welcomed the influence of the foreign cultures. This is not a desire to merely travel, but rather to drown myself in a new experience and learn to swim. Every experience, as I have learned, changes the participant, the degree of which is dependent on the person. I am the type that yearns for those changes; those new perspectives; those new challenges that are only available through trial and error far detached from the comfort zone.
However, the ability to adapt and, in some cases, evolve, is dependent on a fundamental core. Without the strength of this core, adaptability becomes a lack of self and the yearning for new experiences becomes a runaway tactic.
The privilege of joining the United States Navy is not a promise of employment, with a paycheck and benefits, nor a grandiose sense of honor, duty and courage. The Navy promises to challenge your core. Through discipline, hard work, and passion, I see the Navy as committing to go deeper than my other experiences that have “changed” me and, instead, found my core. These required traits are not foreign to me. Graduating from Wake Forest University with a concentration major in communication science with a double minor in Spanish and Chinese as a Dean’s list student is a tribute to my work ethic. Along with academics, I have dedicated myself to the campus Rowing team and have seen the results that come from an intense level of physical and psychological commitment. I am an extremely passionate person who embraces hard work and is fundamentally self-driven, as seen through my leadership roles on campus, multiple employments such as a resident advisor, and my passion for foreign cultures and languages as seen through my study abroad experiences. This is all a part of my core.
Some individuals allow the military to create, rather than evolve their core. This is not the case with me. I am confident in and proud of whom I have evolved myself into being. Too often these adjectives are associated with close mindedness and stubbornness. I consider my confidence the catalyst for seeking the life style change the Navy expects and demands. To me, the United States Navy promises a commitment of self to a higher standard of living, being, and participating as a citizen of the United States of America. I’m ready, and yearning, for that challenge.
I was wondering if anyone would be willing to comment on my motivation statement? Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. I am trying (desperately) to get into Navy Intel--something I have always wanted to do.
I adapt. I believe I do it well; especially in other countries and cultures. I dropped myself in Costa Rica, Taiwan, and Italy for extended periods of time and welcomed the influence of the foreign cultures. This is not a desire to merely travel, but rather to drown myself in a new experience and learn to swim. Every experience, as I have learned, changes the participant, the degree of which is dependent on the person. I am the type that yearns for those changes; those new perspectives; those new challenges that are only available through trial and error far detached from the comfort zone.
However, the ability to adapt and, in some cases, evolve, is dependent on a fundamental core. Without the strength of this core, adaptability becomes a lack of self and the yearning for new experiences becomes a runaway tactic.
The privilege of joining the United States Navy is not a promise of employment, with a paycheck and benefits, nor a grandiose sense of honor, duty and courage. The Navy promises to challenge your core. Through discipline, hard work, and passion, I see the Navy as committing to go deeper than my other experiences that have “changed” me and, instead, found my core. These required traits are not foreign to me. Graduating from Wake Forest University with a concentration major in communication science with a double minor in Spanish and Chinese as a Dean’s list student is a tribute to my work ethic. Along with academics, I have dedicated myself to the campus Rowing team and have seen the results that come from an intense level of physical and psychological commitment. I am an extremely passionate person who embraces hard work and is fundamentally self-driven, as seen through my leadership roles on campus, multiple employments such as a resident advisor, and my passion for foreign cultures and languages as seen through my study abroad experiences. This is all a part of my core.
Some individuals allow the military to create, rather than evolve their core. This is not the case with me. I am confident in and proud of whom I have evolved myself into being. Too often these adjectives are associated with close mindedness and stubbornness. I consider my confidence the catalyst for seeking the life style change the Navy expects and demands. To me, the United States Navy promises a commitment of self to a higher standard of living, being, and participating as a citizen of the United States of America. I’m ready, and yearning, for that challenge.
