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Intel: Day in the Life
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DangerousDan
I could tell you but I would have to kill you
Great Vid. I actually had one of the LTs in Bahrain sent it to our whole class yesterday( Thanks spy)... I still think the best one was 07020's casino Royale spoof with the traditional James bond looking down the barrel .
That's awesome. That was pretty much ballz on the point. And remember ...I flew RIVET JOINT and had to deal with INTEL, DIA, et al waaaaay too many times.
You didn't hear me say this, but they have a higher sense of self importance than even P3 or HS guys!:tongue2_1
You didn't hear me say this, but they have a higher sense of self importance than even P3 or HS guys!:tongue2_1
WishICouldFly
UO Future Pork Chop
Re-designation Letter
Hey everyone,
So I finally sat down and wrote out my tentative redesignation letter for Intelligence (from Supply).
It's very specific since it is only to the Intelligence Selection Board.
I have three stellar letters of recommendation, but I honestly feel like my letter is the weakest point of the re-designation request.
Can some of you guys look at it and tell me if it is too abstract, too stupid, etc...
Godspeed, if you're around, I would appreciate input, since you went through this exact same process for SNA!
Thanks.
Hey everyone,
So I finally sat down and wrote out my tentative redesignation letter for Intelligence (from Supply).
It's very specific since it is only to the Intelligence Selection Board.
I have three stellar letters of recommendation, but I honestly feel like my letter is the weakest point of the re-designation request.
Can some of you guys look at it and tell me if it is too abstract, too stupid, etc...
Godspeed, if you're around, I would appreciate input, since you went through this exact same process for SNA!
Thanks.
Hey, I looked over your letter, and you have some really good information down. I edited a little, and will detail the direction I think you should go.
Note: these are just my suggestions, dont feel obligated in any way to change something you feel is stronger in your opinion.... just want to help, like many on here have helped me.
Paragraph 1:
-opening line, " I have received the prestigious honor" or "I have been accepted in the BDCP(spell it out like you did)
-second phrase, ditch "prestigious" in front of supply corps.
-ditch "in any way" both times in the last sentence.
-ditch, "that has been given", you can change that to "bestowed upon"
- so your last phrase can read " I am not unhappy or disappoined with being selected for the Supply Corps, nor am I unappreciative of the amazing privilege bestowed upon me in the form of the BDCP."
Paragraph 2:
-rather than "I am able to learn well" think of something like "I am motivated to learn, and I am able....." that flows better
-put a comma after "interviews" and after "campaign" that seems like a good break point
-ditch "all" in that sentence: "....mission that were crucial to the...."
-rephrase the beginning of the next sentence " I did not have experience in the assignments I was given, but learned....."
-ditch "resoucefully" after the comma. The actions you list show that you were being resourceful.
Paragraph 3:
-Ditch "Personally, I believe": be confident. tell them. "I will be a Naval Officer first, and my specific job will..... "
-ditch "thus" : so it will read "Regardless of my designator, I have.... "
-ditch "a" and "that is" in the rest of that sentence. "being professional, hard-working, intelligent, and effective" you could even drop intelligent and it would continue to convey a strong positive message.
-the rest of the paragraph flows well, and i think is very good
Paragraph 4:
- ditch the "and" in the second sentence. It runs two thoughts together. Take the second half "love to read and learn", put it together with the 3rd sentence. would go something like this " My love of reading and learning enables me to continue researching a topic until I have found the answers to my questions. I will exhaust every resource availible to me during my studies as well."
- you dont need the Europe/Somalia examples
- ditch "both" at the beginning of the next sentence. "As a student of Economics and as a person, I naturally...."
- rephrase "I do not do...." later in the paragraph: something like " My research is not only for personal enjoyment, but for informing my collegues of current events, etc."
- Last sentence of the paragraph is good. rephrase slightly "whether it is a squadron.... he is briefing" to "whether its is briefing a squadron or the Commanding Officer of a ship."
Paragraph 5:
- 3rd sentence can drop "that this" and drop "any"... I dont know if there is a way to clear up or reword "strategic level brief is critical" if it doesnt need anything leave it alone. This is the only thing that threw me for a second.
- last sentence put a comma between squadron and ship. ".....best benefit the squadron, ship or unit I am responsible for briefing." you can drop "that" in the sentence as well
Paragraph 6:
-change "any" in the first sentence to "the": "......to complete the task at hand."
- last sentence is good. spice it up with some strong words. "I strongly believe that my skills and qualifications can best serve the mission of the Navy as an Intelligence Officer. Thank you for your time and consideration."
All in all this has a lot of very good information, just some fine tuning and it should be good to go. As noted above, these are only my suggestions, use what you want, discard what you want. Good luck to you, and PM if anything isnt clear, and I will do my best to explain.
Note: these are just my suggestions, dont feel obligated in any way to change something you feel is stronger in your opinion.... just want to help, like many on here have helped me.
Paragraph 1:
-opening line, " I have received the prestigious honor" or "I have been accepted in the BDCP(spell it out like you did)
-second phrase, ditch "prestigious" in front of supply corps.
-ditch "in any way" both times in the last sentence.
-ditch, "that has been given", you can change that to "bestowed upon"
- so your last phrase can read " I am not unhappy or disappoined with being selected for the Supply Corps, nor am I unappreciative of the amazing privilege bestowed upon me in the form of the BDCP."
Paragraph 2:
-rather than "I am able to learn well" think of something like "I am motivated to learn, and I am able....." that flows better
-put a comma after "interviews" and after "campaign" that seems like a good break point
-ditch "all" in that sentence: "....mission that were crucial to the...."
-rephrase the beginning of the next sentence " I did not have experience in the assignments I was given, but learned....."
-ditch "resoucefully" after the comma. The actions you list show that you were being resourceful.
Paragraph 3:
-Ditch "Personally, I believe": be confident. tell them. "I will be a Naval Officer first, and my specific job will..... "
-ditch "thus" : so it will read "Regardless of my designator, I have.... "
-ditch "a" and "that is" in the rest of that sentence. "being professional, hard-working, intelligent, and effective" you could even drop intelligent and it would continue to convey a strong positive message.
-the rest of the paragraph flows well, and i think is very good
Paragraph 4:
- ditch the "and" in the second sentence. It runs two thoughts together. Take the second half "love to read and learn", put it together with the 3rd sentence. would go something like this " My love of reading and learning enables me to continue researching a topic until I have found the answers to my questions. I will exhaust every resource availible to me during my studies as well."
- you dont need the Europe/Somalia examples
- ditch "both" at the beginning of the next sentence. "As a student of Economics and as a person, I naturally...."
- rephrase "I do not do...." later in the paragraph: something like " My research is not only for personal enjoyment, but for informing my collegues of current events, etc."
- Last sentence of the paragraph is good. rephrase slightly "whether it is a squadron.... he is briefing" to "whether its is briefing a squadron or the Commanding Officer of a ship."
Paragraph 5:
- 3rd sentence can drop "that this" and drop "any"... I dont know if there is a way to clear up or reword "strategic level brief is critical" if it doesnt need anything leave it alone. This is the only thing that threw me for a second.
- last sentence put a comma between squadron and ship. ".....best benefit the squadron, ship or unit I am responsible for briefing." you can drop "that" in the sentence as well
Paragraph 6:
-change "any" in the first sentence to "the": "......to complete the task at hand."
- last sentence is good. spice it up with some strong words. "I strongly believe that my skills and qualifications can best serve the mission of the Navy as an Intelligence Officer. Thank you for your time and consideration."
All in all this has a lot of very good information, just some fine tuning and it should be good to go. As noted above, these are only my suggestions, use what you want, discard what you want. Good luck to you, and PM if anything isnt clear, and I will do my best to explain.
WishICouldFly
UO Future Pork Chop
Arkad,
It is not a common thing, but I know that it has been done. Godspeed on here has re-designated from Supply to SNA. My processor has confirmed that it can happen, however unlikely.
I am also BDCP, not NROTC or USNA.
It is not a common thing, but I know that it has been done. Godspeed on here has re-designated from Supply to SNA. My processor has confirmed that it can happen, however unlikely.
I am also BDCP, not NROTC or USNA.
WishICouldFly
UO Future Pork Chop
Thank you, Cams, for the detailed and specific advice!
Read a lot - Write a little
The work space is typically like an office (or somewhat) with many cubicals.
You read a lot of information, pick out what is important, draft a product (what type of product depends on the importance of the information and the audience you want to get it to) and push the info up/down the chain of command. You will also present the information in briefs (after you have written the product).
That is the overly simplistic view.
You will gain a lot of insight from those around you who have been working a while on the problem set you are assigned. You will also learn to write with precision (hopefully) so you can convey a message clearly, concisely, and in as short a product as possible (unlike this post).
The type of leadership duties will depend on the size of the team you have. Most of your time will be developing your analytical and writing skills, rather than leadership skills (my opinion – this will vary from command to command, less leadership development at the beginning, more towards the end).
A little general, but do you get the idea?
The work space is typically like an office (or somewhat) with many cubicals.
You read a lot of information, pick out what is important, draft a product (what type of product depends on the importance of the information and the audience you want to get it to) and push the info up/down the chain of command. You will also present the information in briefs (after you have written the product).
That is the overly simplistic view.
You will gain a lot of insight from those around you who have been working a while on the problem set you are assigned. You will also learn to write with precision (hopefully) so you can convey a message clearly, concisely, and in as short a product as possible (unlike this post).
The type of leadership duties will depend on the size of the team you have. Most of your time will be developing your analytical and writing skills, rather than leadership skills (my opinion – this will vary from command to command, less leadership development at the beginning, more towards the end).
A little general, but do you get the idea?
Logico
Registered User
JKD - Thanks, I think I get it. What are some of the "newbie" mistakes people make when the show up?
Hozer - Sorry, but what is Allied Forge? Also, what was your general impression of Molesworth? Is it dominated by Air Force or is it a good mix of "joint" forces? Did it seem like a fun place to work?
Hozer - Sorry, but what is Allied Forge? Also, what was your general impression of Molesworth? Is it dominated by Air Force or is it a good mix of "joint" forces? Did it seem like a fun place to work?
The only thing I can think of is no matter how much experieince you have, don't come in thinking you know everything... but that is true with any new position you step into.
I'm sure you'll do fine.
big ears, small mouth
try to do more listening than talking
don't get stuck in one shop
try to do the vulcan mind meld with some of the civilians that have been doing the same job for longer than you've been alive...a lot to learn from them
- Same rule for some of the enlisted guys, listen
Don't worry about your fitrep or ranking...if you do your job right, it will take care of itself.
read all the products that you can from everywhere
learn some systems
try to get in the briefing shop.
travel, from whichever JIC you end up, don't stay home, travel and see as much as you can.
most all, have fun, if you don't, not good
just a few, hope it helps, enjoy it.
try to do more listening than talking
don't get stuck in one shop
try to do the vulcan mind meld with some of the civilians that have been doing the same job for longer than you've been alive...a lot to learn from them
- Same rule for some of the enlisted guys, listen
Don't worry about your fitrep or ranking...if you do your job right, it will take care of itself.
read all the products that you can from everywhere
learn some systems
try to get in the briefing shop.
travel, from whichever JIC you end up, don't stay home, travel and see as much as you can.
most all, have fun, if you don't, not good
just a few, hope it helps, enjoy it.