So I am freaking out a little over a MORON mistake I just noticed on my application. I can't believe I did this but in my rush to get my app submitted I did not swap out my revised (sub 400 word) motivational statement. I am a little over, and I know that the people on the boards don't count, but anybody eve heard of a mistake like mine ending up being the reason for a non-select? I called my recruiter and the secretary said it wasn't a big deal. There aren't any grammatical mistakes or mispellings that I can find. Here is the non-revised version that hopefully didn't sink my ship at the boards:
"Freedom has its life in the hearts, the actions, the spirit of men and so it must be daily earned and refreshed - else like a flower cut from its life-giving roots, it will wither and die." - Dwight D. Eisenhower.
By the grace of God I was born into this great country, The United States of America, with freedoms, liberties, and rights most of the world will never know. Great sacrifices of brave men and women have allowed me to experience these freedoms, and it is by their service that America continues to stand for what is good about humanity. It is their acts of selflessness and honor that inspire me to apply for a commission in The United States Navy. My education and experiences have prepared me to offer my service, and potentially even my life, for the freedom and ideals of our country. I am driven by the desire to defend our traditions and our rights; and to do my part to promote these inalienable rights in other nations as well. I have been blessed with the values, passions, and heart that will allow me to be a leader as a Naval Officer, whatever and wherever circumstance.
Throughout my youth, and even today, many of my life experiences all share a common theme: leadership. Whether it be as a team captain, Senior Patrol Leader, Club Founder, or young adult leader at church, these experiences have instilled in me a skillset and mindset that is absolutely necessary of any successful leader. Having served as a leader in a plethora of different environments, it has become very apparent that there is one predominant attribute of any successful group: teammwork. My services in leadership roles have ALL culminated with goals met, not to mention the formation of lasting relationships.
Not only have my past experiences fostered in me skills and knowledge that I will utilize as a Naval Officer, but my education also lends itself well to a successful commission. Both my undergraduate and graduate degrees are in Geography, which can be described as more of an approach than a specific area of study. These degree programs have illustrated to me that a holistic, integrative approach to problem solving is extremely effective. My experiences utilizing this type of approach have confirmed that having a sound awareness of all variables associated with a dilema is ideal.
My passion for flight is something that simply cannot be put into words. While this passion is not unlike other candidates in this respect, I know without a shadow of a doubt that even the opportunity to join the ranks of the world's most elite aviators provides motivation enough for me to press on through whatever challenges commissioning and flight school demand. While a commission in and of itself is an indescribeable honor, my feeling is that serving as an aviator is the most relevant career path to my own personal background and experiences.
I sincerely appreciate the time taken to review my application to become a Naval Officer, and I feel it is a privilege that I am even granted the opportunity to apply to Officer Candidate School. I sincerely hope that my file is at the very least satisfactory enough for my selection for commission. I personally am very humbled by your consideration and wholeheartidly thank you for your service to our country.