Motivational Statement MEGA Thread

[TahoeDiver]

I love this. I think I'm going to add this to my resume. Is there a lot of crime that occurs below the surface at Lake Tahoe?

Oh man, if only people would dispose of evidence in Lake Tahoe... 99% of my Sheriff's office diving was done in black water mud holes near Reno or dangling at the end of a rope in the Truckee River. I don't know what it is about people in Reno, but they love to steal cars and then drive them into golf course ponds for some reason. Or stab their buddy and throw the knife into the river.

 

[TahoeDiver]

Also, if my schedule is right, there is no January board. There was a December one that was due last week, and then one in March

CK - thanks so much for the feedback, it is VERY much appreciated! I do think your calendar is off or you're looking at a different board. My OR assures me the FY 17 DCO board for IWC will meet in early January, with packages due early December. My OR has also lined up interviews for me in Portland for 11/28 with Intel and other IWC officers. thanks again!

 

[CK#4]

CK - thanks so much for the feedback, it is VERY much appreciated! I do think your calendar is off or you're looking at a different board. My OR assures me the FY 17 DCO board for IWC will meet in early January, with packages due early December. My OR has also lined up interviews for me in Portland for 11/28 with Intel and other IWC officers. thanks again!

no problem brother...also, attached find the FY17 calendar

 

[TahoeDiver]

no problem brother...also, attached find the FY17 calendar

Great, thanks. I see my board in there:
IWC (INTEL/CW/IP/ OCEANO & SWO-IWC Options) DCO BOARD NAVIDFOR 9-Dec-16 16-Dec-16 16-Jan-17

 

[hewdawg83]

Keeping this board alive!

I'm applying for the upcoming AMDO board. I wasn't sure if I should talk qualifications in aviation maintenance or Naval Officer qualities. Feel free to critique and rip apart! I appreciate the help.


The path to Officer Candidacy has been a long, arduous road that’s been paved with triumphs and lessons learned in the face of adversity. I enlisted in the Marine Corps in 2002, just 4 months after the September 11 attacks and participated in the delayed entry program until my ship date of September 8. I understood that I was going to war from the onset of taking the oath of enlistment. While a certain degree of fear existed in that young man of 19, it was the desire of service to our great country and camaraderie that drove me through the many challenges the combat environment presents.

My technical acumen is proven with experience in numerous levels of aviation maintenance. I served in both intermediate and organizational level maintenance from carrying boxes to running divisions. I lateral moved to the MV-22 Osprey community after my first enlistment. That transition to a new occupational field was instrumental to my growth as a leader. Being new to the O-Level experience, I had to approach the situation with humility as I was an NCO being primarily taught by junior Marines. Eventually, I earned my qualifications as inspector and was asked to start a new unit from the ground up. I was able to set the pace of the avionics division that would lead to great success in 2 deployments to Afghanistan and numerous training operations. Those appointed over me have come to rely on my experience with great responsibility and autonomy, filling billets normally held by senior enlisted. While I rely heavily on wisdom gained from service, it’s the ability to know where strengths stop and limitations begin that has made me most successful. Leaders do not hide their weaknesses, they identify them and either strengthen them or surround themselves with others to assists in their shortcomings.

The most rewarding gift I’ve received is the opportunity to lead, mentor, and train. As an instructor, I’ve had the opportunity to directly pass on my influence and fleet knowledge to over 70 Sailors and 107 Marines across numerous occupational specialties and navy enlisted classifications. I’ve prepared junior enlisted for the rigors and demands of the fleet, both in physical readiness, professionalism, and basic maintenance knowledge. My hope is that I’ve made the Marine Corps and Navy better institutions through injecting young, competent leaders who will grow to be future effective NCOs, LPOs, Senior Enlisted, and Commanders. Emotional intellect and intuition has guided my decisions in the academic environment, treating each person as a unique individual

The best qualities that make me a great candidate are communication, time management, and dedication. Prioritization is an art I’ve come to master. Unlike most applicants, I enrolled in college courses between deployments while maintaining professional military training requirements. I remained dedicated as a college student while attending residential military training. I earned my degree while serving and continue to strive for post-secondary excellence in graduate school. Major accomplishments include membership into S.A.L.U.T.E National Honor Society and academic recognition through both Full Sail University and Syracuse University. I’m able to leverage my education in many platforms and briefs across a wide range of subject matter due to a combination of experience and education.

Inspiration for becoming an officer came from the many great, transformational leaders I’ve had the pleasure of serving with. From the shared experiences of my old Aviation Maintenance Officers in my formative days entering the V-22 program, to the more recent COs I’ve known since their early days as junior Aviators; I’ve come to understand the dynamic impact a great officer can influence. I want nothing more than to pass on the inspiration I’ve received. The Navy’s values of commitment to continual improvement to self and others profoundly align with my own values. I am confident in my abilities to lead in a much larger role than any opportunity I will have as an enlisted service member.

 

[PRarce2]

I placed my thread in the wrong place I guess. Please provide feedback

https://www.airwarriors.com/communi...dco-motivational-statement.44677/#post-866928

 

[Kevin C. Orr]

Hello all,

I am applying for OCS and am almost finished with my application. I am applying for SWO/Intel/SNA, so I am struggling with how much emphasis to put on the individual communities. I would love to be a pilot, but I would also be happy as a SWO or in Intel:


The day I moved in for my senior year, I hung my American flag from the front porch, and I placed a small one in the front yard of my house. At first I thought it would be a nice accent to the yard, but when I began the process of applying to be a Naval Officer, the flag has become much more than an accent to me. Every time I leave my house to run, I touch the flag when I begin, and when I finish. The small flag reminds me that my journey, whatever it may be, from beginning to end, would only be possible because of those who have gone before me to defend our country and way of life. That without them, my life would be drastically different.

As a sailor, my life on the water afforded me opportunities which now have culminated in my desire to become a U.S. Naval Officer. My restoration of two rotting sailboats into beautiful vessels gave me passion for hard work, resilience, and patience. Sailing itself gave me my love for being on the water and a respect for the power of the sea. But my time spent on the U.S. Brig Niagara ingrained my understanding for how integral teamwork is on a naval war vessel; how attention to detail while at the helm or standing watch can make the difference between life and death, and having the courage to go aloft over Lake Superior, to reach out the stern of the ship in the middle of a storm in order to retrieve a stray line, or fire a nineteenth century cannon. No experience in my lifetime has had such a profound impact on my character.

However, my desire to become a U.S. Naval Officer goes beyond my love for country, my passion for sailing, and the desire to represent something bigger than myself as an individual . My grandfather served as a Naval Aviator in the Second World War, and represented the Navy's core values of honor, courage and commitment. He was a man who served his country without hesitation, lived a life with attention to detail in every facet, whether it was organizing tools or organizing spices, and held his children and grandchildren to the highest moral standard. He was my greatest role model, and I cannot fathom anything that would honor his legacy better than for his only grandson to become a U.S. Naval Officer.

If you have any advice or suggestions, I would appreciate it. Thanks.

 

[exNavyOffRec]

Hello all,

I am applying for OCS and am almost finished with my application. I am applying for SWO/Intel/SNA, so I am struggling with how much emphasis to put on the individual communities. I would love to be a pilot, but I would also be happy as a SWO or in Intel:


The day I moved in for my senior year, I hung my American flag from the front porch, and I placed a small one in the front yard of my house. At first I thought it would be a nice accent to the yard, but when I began the process of applying to be a Naval Officer, the flag has become much more than an accent to me. Every time I leave my house to run, I touch the flag when I begin, and when I finish. The small flag reminds me that my journey, whatever it may be, from beginning to end, would only be possible because of those who have gone before me to defend our country and way of life. That without them, my life would be drastically different.

As a sailor, my life on the water afforded me opportunities which now have culminated in my desire to become a U.S. Naval Officer. My restoration of two rotting sailboats into beautiful vessels gave me passion for hard work, resilience, and patience. Sailing itself gave me my love for being on the water and a respect for the power of the sea. But my time spent on the U.S. Brig Niagara ingrained my understanding for how integral teamwork is on a naval war vessel; how attention to detail while at the helm or standing watch can make the difference between life and death, and having the courage to go aloft over Lake Superior, to reach out the stern of the ship in the middle of a storm in order to retrieve a stray line, or fire a nineteenth century cannon. No experience in my lifetime has had such a profound impact on my character.

However, my desire to become a U.S. Naval Officer goes beyond my love for country, my passion for sailing, and the desire to represent something bigger than myself as an individual . My grandfather served as a Naval Aviator in the Second World War, and represented the Navy's core values of honor, courage and commitment. He was a man who served his country without hesitation, lived a life with attention to detail in every facet, whether it was organizing tools or organizing spices, and held his children and grandchildren to the highest moral standard. He was my greatest role model, and I cannot fathom anything that would honor his legacy better than for his only grandson to become a U.S. Naval Officer.

If you have any advice or suggestions, I would appreciate it. Thanks.

SNA really doesn't care about the motivational statement, have you taken your ASTB to see if you are eligible for SNA, Intel rarely picks a person that doesn't list them 1st, and do you have a high GPA for Intel?

for the statement itself, cite what you have done to lead people, been part of a team, volunteered for something, etc....

 

[snzellers]

Would anyone be willing to take a look at my MS if I posted it? I submit in 2 weeks and I'm hoping to get a few more eyes on it before then.

 

[koliver]

Would anyone be willing to take a look at my MS if I posted it? I submit in 2 weeks and I'm hoping to get a few more eyes on it before then.

From what most people say is that the statement is barely looked at. I would just have your recruiter look at it and then maybe take it to a writing editor if you're still at college.

 

[PRarce2]

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[loch]

My OR hasn't mentioned a motivational statement. She also has told me there won't be an in-person interview. Is this new? I'm applying for the 11 July 17 Aviation boards.

 

[Chovy]

Any thoughts on this mot. statement?

Both of my grandfathers and many members of my family have served in the U.S. Armed Forces. Their commitment to our country inspired my own patriotism and the desire to be a part of something larger than myself. Growing up in a post-9/11 society, my heroes have always been the men and women in uniform. I always knew my patriotism and fondness for these heroes would one day compel me to serve.

I will be the first Iavarone to serve in the 21st century and there is no better place to continue this family tradition than the branch that is the embodiment of customs and traditions: The United States Navy. Studying American history is a hobby of mine and nothing gets me more excited than seeing the old grainy film reels of the mighty Fletcher-class destroyers tearing through the ocean. However, the Navy’s success has always been more about the capabilities of the sailors aboard than those of the ship. I possess the stamina, integrity, and intuition needed to lead sailors as a Naval Officer, more specifically as a Surface Warfare Officer.

Although I consider myself athletic, most would first acquaint me with intelligence and an unrelenting will to succeed. As a student, I simultaneously thrived in multiple environments. At one point, I was employed at a law firm, a global bank, enrolled in school, and raising capital for an entrepreneurial venture. Before my 22nd birthday, I had raised over $100,000 and produced an iPhone app. Although the app itself was not a success, I channeled my own experiences to write a book that would help future entrepreneurs be successful in their own mobile app ventures. I understood that my own knowledge on the topic had its limits so I collaborated and coordinated with over twenty industry experts to construct a meaningful and impactful doctrine.

I intend to lead the same way as Surface Warfare Officer with an emphasis on collaboration and gathering informed input, taking full responsibility for my mistakes, and continuing to strive for success regardless of the odds. The SWO community will benefit from an ambitious young officer with an entrepreneurial mindset and an innovative background.

My late grandfather Carl Iavarone, an Army Air Force veteran, zig-zagged across the Pacific aboard the USS Washington during World War II. He always referred to U.S. Naval Officers as the “gold standard” of the military. I’m humbled at the opportunity, but am ready to sacrifice everything to be among the gold.

 

[hahahannah]

Any thoughts on this mot. statement?

Both of my grandfathers and many members of my family have served in the U.S. Armed Forces. Their commitment to our country inspired my own patriotism and the desire to be a part of something larger than myself. Growing up in a post-9/11 society, my heroes have always been the men and women in uniform. I always knew my patriotism and fondness for these heroes would one day compel me to serve.

I will be the first Iavarone to serve in the 21st century and there is no better place to continue this family tradition than the branch that is the embodiment of customs and traditions: The United States Navy. Studying American history is a hobby of mine and nothing gets me more excited than seeing the old grainy film reels of the mighty Fletcher-class destroyers tearing through the ocean. However, the Navy’s success has always been more about the capabilities of the sailors aboard than those of the ship. I possess the stamina, integrity, and intuition needed to lead sailors as a Naval Officer, more specifically as a Surface Warfare Officer.

Although I consider myself athletic, most would first acquaint me with intelligence and an unrelenting will to succeed. As a student, I simultaneously thrived in multiple environments. At one point, I was employed at a law firm, a global bank, enrolled in school, and raising capital for an entrepreneurial venture. Before my 22nd birthday, I had raised over $100,000 and produced an iPhone app. Although the app itself was not a success, I channeled my own experiences to write a book that would help future entrepreneurs be successful in their own mobile app ventures. I understood that my own knowledge on the topic had its limits so I collaborated and coordinated with over twenty industry experts to construct a meaningful and impactful doctrine.

I intend to lead the same way as Surface Warfare Officer with an emphasis on collaboration and gathering informed input, taking full responsibility for my mistakes, and continuing to strive for success regardless of the odds. The SWO community will benefit from an ambitious young officer with an entrepreneurial mindset and an innovative background.

My late grandfather Carl Iavarone, an Army Air Force veteran, zig-zagged across the Pacific aboard the USS Washington during World War II. He always referred to U.S. Naval Officers as the “gold standard” of the military. I’m humbled at the opportunity, but am ready to sacrifice everything to be among the gold.

we went to the same school!
You've probably submitted by now but if you haven't, i would fix the paragraph about all of your accomplishments. It's good to have in there but you spend a lot of time talking about things you've done (iphone app, raising money, etc) but not enough time talking about why those things are relevant to the navy or would make you a good officer. Just my two cents. You could make a connection between how motivating people through the book you wrote will be a transferrable skill when trying to motivate people you may be in charge of in the Navy..

 

[PRarce2]

Chovy,
Not to dig at you but Cmaason has a point. As a GM1 and finally working with SWO you have to be an extreme people person. So, what would you bring to the SWO community in terms of leadership. You will possibly be in a Division Officer position how will the skills you learned help you lead fleet forces?

Personally, I would talk more about why you want to be a SWO. Idk "As a SWO I would like to one day be in charge of a Coastal Riverine Squadron (CRS) and eventually an CVN.

In your positions were you just there helping raise $100k or did you take the lead?

You want to be the first in your family in the 21st century? Will you stop if they say no? Or "I will not stop until I achieve my dream"

Sell yourself and focus on leadership attributes you bring to the table. Read the CNO's vision and mission statement