Mew
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I just put the final touches on my motivational statement, any thoughts or recommendations?
thanks in advance
As long as I can remember, the men and women I looked up to as a child were members of the United States Armed Forces. From my grandparents who served during World War II to friends who are contributing towards the war on terror; they all served as an inspiration for me to join the Navy Reserves at an early age. My experience in the Navy Reserves has taught me strong military discipline, a higher level of responsibility, and the importance of adhering to the core values of honor, courage, and commitment. Learning such valuable lessons has instilled me with the desire to foster these traits in future sailors by serving as a United States Naval Officer.
While serving as a Third Class Petty Officer with Operational Health Support Unit San Diego, my role as a leader contributed to developing more than 40 junior sailors into functioning unit members. The success of our new sailors and my personal dedication to providing the highest level of patient care, contributed to our unit being presented with the Meritorious Unit Commendation Award.
During my experience on a firefighting helicopter module I was consistently expected to lead our crew of firefighters. As a chainsaw operator, my duties are to stay ahead of the crew in order to choose the safest and most effective line for us to follow while engaging the fire. My leadership sets the tone; providing motivation and instilling confidence under stressful situations. Being expected to operate one of the most dangerous tools on the fireline and lead a crew of firefighters through extremely hazardous conditions has tested my abilities on many occasions. I found success by having the courage to perform in such a dangerous role, despite the fear of being overrun by the fire we were battling. For any major fire we engaged, commitment to our mission was always tested. On average, our assignments consisted of carrying 65lbs on your back, hiking through horrible terrain, with sweat pouring down your face, all while breathing smoke that is burning your lungs and eyes. I often found myself asking why I am doing this, but my commitment to a higher duty always prevailed. Maintaining a positive relationship with my crew and other resources on the fire taught me a level of honor I’ll never lose.
It would be an honor to apply the skills I have developed thus far in the role of a United States Naval Officer and Naval Aviator. Through a commission I have every intention to become the best Naval Aviator I can be while further developing my skills as a leader in the United States Navy.
"From my grandparents who served during World War II to friends who are contributing towards the war on terror; they all served as an inspiration for me to join the Navy Reserves at an early age"
This sentence is awkward and while it is clear what you mean because of the context. However with out knowing the full context it isn't 100% clear which side of the war on terror your friends are on
